2016年高考英语命题作文写作技巧

Teachinggoals-----教学目标1.Howtomakeanoutline2.Howtopickoutimportantpoints3.Howtowritebeautifulsentences4.Howtoorganizethesentenceslogically假设你是李华,你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机.因有质量问题,要求该公司更换.请根据下列要点,用英文写一封电子邮件.1.问题:手机不响铃,不能发短信;该产品已售完,无法更换;型号新,无配件,无法维修.2.要求:公司应尽快予以更换.注意:1.词数为120左右;2.参考词汇:配件(sparepart)Thestyle:exposition（说明文）Themainidea:PresenttheproblemswiththephoneandaskforachangePerson:thefirstperson第一人称Tense:thepresenttense现在式andthepasttense过去式Task1ExaminethecontentcarefullyTask2提炼要点,确定重点词汇,划分段落Importantpoints：threeproblemsplusonedemand要点：三个问题加一个要求Point1:notring;notsendmessagesPoint2：soldout;notchange…for…或notexchange…for…或notreplace…with…Point3：newmodel;nospareparts;repair/fix/maintainPoint4：require/requestsb.todosth或demandofsb.todosth.Task3连词成句1.手机不响铃,不能发短信Itdoesn’tring.Itdoesn’tsendshortmessages.2.该产品已售完,无法更换Themodelhasbeensoldout.Theycan’tchangeanewoneforme.3.型号新,无配件,无法维修ItisanewmodelinChina.Itisimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.4.要求公司应尽快予以更换Idemandof/require/requestyourcompanytochangeanewoneformeassoonaspossible.Task4提升句子，组句成篇注意：灵活运用好句式一.使用非谓语动词(nonfiniteverb)使句子简洁高档二.巧用倒装(inversion)结构增强句子的表现力三.尝试多样化表达方式,如：1.感叹句(theexclamatory)2.with短语3.定语从句(theattributiveclause)4.各种名词性从句5.各种状语从句(theadverbialclause)1.手机不响铃,不能发短信整合前：Itdoesn’tring.Itdoesn’tsendshortmessages.整合后：可以造至少两个并列句(or,meanwhile,either)a.Itcan’tringorsendshortmessages.b.Itdoesn’tringatallandmeanwhileitdoesn’tsendshortmessages.（Neither….nor句式）c.Itcanneitherringnorsendshortmessages.可造至少两个倒装句式（notonly…butalso,nor,neither）d.Notonlydoesitfailtoring,butalsoitcan’tsendamessage.e.Themobilephonecan’tring,norcanitsendmessages.2.该产品已售完,无法更换整合前：Themodelhasbeensoldout.Theycan’tchangeanewoneforme.整合后：a.Thenewmodelhasbeensoldoutsothattheycan’tchangeanewoneforme.b.Themodelhasbeensoldout,asaconsequence,it’simpossibleforthemtochangeanewoneforme.(非限制性定语从句nonfiniteattributiveclause)c.Themodelhasbeensoldout,whichmakesitimpossibleformetohaveanewone.（主语从句）d.Thefactthatthemodelhasbeensoldoutmakesmeunabletochangeit.（结果状语从句至少两个sothat，asaconsequence/result）3.型号新,无配件,无法维修整合前：ItisanewmodelinChina.Itisimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.整合后：a.Sinceit’sanewmodelandthere’renospareparts,Ican’tgetitrepaired.b.SonewisitstypewithoutanysparepartsthatIcan’tgetitrepaired.c.Withitsnewtypeandnosparepartsleft,Ifindithardtohaveitrepaired.原因状语从句because，since，as和倒装句各一个so…thatwith结构一个4.要求公司应尽快予以更换整合前：Irequire/requestyourcompanytochangeanewoneformeassoonaspossible.整合后：宾语从句a.Toconclude,Idemand/require/requestthatyourcompanyshouldhavemyphonechangedassoonaspossible.用appreciateitifB.I’dreallyappreciateitifyoucouldreplaceitsoon.包含宾语从句、同位语从句、虚拟语气及被动语态的句子C.Ihopethatmyrequirementthatyoushouldchangeanewphoneofthesamemodelformecanbesatisfiedassoonaspossible.5.检查誊写仔细誊写，保证字迹工整，卷面整洁。Whichoneispreferred?DearSir,……Tendaysafterthat,itdidn’tringorsendshortmessages.ThenItookittotheseller,butwastoldthatthemodelhadbeensoldoutandIhadtowaitatleastthreemonthsforanewone.LaterIwenttotherepairman.Hesaidsinceitwasanew-modelinChina,itwasimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.Iwassodesperateonhearingthat.HowcanIwaitthatlong?Therefore,Irequirethatyousendmeanewoneofthesamemodelwithinamonth.Thankyouforyourconsideration.Yours,Sincerely书面表达的五个步骤1.仔细审题（4确定）（1）体裁格式_________（2）题材内容_________（3）中心人称_________（4）主体时态_________2.提炼要点，确定重点词汇，划分段落3.连词成句4.提升句子组句成篇5.检查誊写summaryThankyou!