中考英语作文讲评课(上海版)

Leavingschool（毕业时分）Growingpainsandgains（成长的烦恼与欢乐）Ihaveadream（我有一个梦想）ThingsIhatetodo（我不喜欢。。。）Lovearoundme（我身边的爱)Iwanttodosomethingformyschool(我为学校做件事）I’mproudofmyself（我为自己感到自豪）1.与生活相关2.与“我”相关Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopicThebestwaytomakemehappy.(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）Whatshouldwewriteabout?Whatshouldn’twe(only)writeabout?Freetalk1.Myschoollife2.Mydreamteacher3.ThethingIhatetodo4.Myopinionsofkeepingpetdogs5.Thebestwaytomakemehappy内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopicThebestwaytomakemehappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)Thebestwaytomakemehappyisachievinggoodmarks.IthinkthiswayisthebestonetomakemehappybecauseitistheeasiestwaysanditcanimprovemyabilitysoIthinkitisthebestway.Inthisway,Icangetsomeprizes,soIwillfeelhappy,what’smoreitcanalsomakemyparentshappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全therearealotofwaystomakemehappy.Thebestwaytomakemehappyistoplaybasketball.Toplaycomputergamesisalsoawaytomakemehappy.EverydaywehavePElesson.Thesearealotofinterestsinit.SoIfeelhappyinthisway.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全thebestwaytomakemehappyistohelpanother.WhenIfeelsad,Icanhelpanother,becauseIhopetheothershappy.Icanhelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadandplaywithsmallchildren.InthiswayIfeelanotherhappy,thenIalsowillhappy.Helpothersnotonlymakemehappy,butalsomakeothershappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?内容不全1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.内容得分5’MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,‘ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.’ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.MytroubleWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)2.Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)3.Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)内容得分5’Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,people’shealthisgettingworseandworse.What’smore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.EnvironmentaroundusWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）内容得分4’ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?内容不全1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.内容得分5’MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,‘ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.’ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.MytroubleWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)2.Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)3.Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)内容得分5’Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwas